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A poem requested by :iconvelvet-o-matic:

Please comment and share your impressions :)
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:icontheparaddict:
TheParaddict Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013   General Artist
Wow sad and touchy at once but really good rhyming though :D (Big Grin) 
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
I'm glad you came to like it ^_^
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:icontheparaddict:
TheParaddict Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   General Artist
Np!
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:iconbaal-the-dementor:
baal-the-dementor Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I always love your poetry, even though it's usually sad
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
Yes, it is ^^; But this was requested, so if it's too sad it's not only my fault xD
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:iconinsomaniac55:
insomaniac55 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013   Writer
The actual poem is good, but I have a lil' aesthetic quibble - the first line is readable, but it is a bit distracting. What if you changed the text to the same color as the one you used in the final line?
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
I agree, it would be more readable that way. But I kind of think that red letters on black background give it that "dark look" it should have. But changing it wouldn't be so bad either :)
Thank you for the advice :D
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:iconxxdarkanimexx:
XxDarkanimexX Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I LOVE THIS
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
I'm glad ^^ Thank you :)
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:iconxxdarkanimexx:
XxDarkanimexX Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome
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:iconmisstsukii:
MissTsukii Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
seriously!! this is great! i missed you marija-chan! :heart:
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Thank you! :hug: I missed you too T^T Sorry, I wasn't so active lately :(
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:iconmisstsukii:
MissTsukii Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh the activity's mutual! i've got no time to write or draw :( 
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013
I understand it :S What are you busy whit, if I may ask? ^^;
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:iconmisstsukii:
MissTsukii Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i'm in my 12th now....so i'm busy cuz of school.... ;(
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013
Oooh, I see...of course :) But it's summer vacation here so I kinda let it slip my mind ^^; Work hard, it'll pay off! :D
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:iconmisstsukii:
MissTsukii Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you sure! but i had to sacrifice on learning to play my violin :(
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013
I feel the pain...just like I sacrificed learning japanese and guitar while I was in high school :( But now I'm in University and have time for everything :)
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chibi4evah Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That reminds me of a poem I wrote. Very emotional, thumbs up from me.
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
I'd like to read your similar poem ^^ Can you send me a link of it? :)
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:iconchibi4evah:
chibi4evah Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sure! Just a warning though, it's very graphic... and so is the description.

[link]
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
I'll check it out now ^_^
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:iconchapel-horde:
Chapel-Horde Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The rhyming scheme is a relief from all the ABAB I keep seeing.
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
I agree xD Little change is always good :)
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:iconbroken-mayhem17:
brOKen-Mayhem17 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
That was truly amazing :) very nice job ;)
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Thank you so much ^_^
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:iconbroken-mayhem17:
brOKen-Mayhem17 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Welcome :)
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Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Student General Artist
Very gritty; I enjoyed the concept. I think the flow needs some tweaking in a few stanzas, but otherwise this is great!
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Thanks for the advice...I'll work on it! :D
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:icontales-of-tao:
Tales-of-Tao Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome. :) Best of luck!
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:icongalm03:
Galm03 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aahh geez, so much pain in this one ;^; makes you wish it wasn't real... It is not... As far i know...

gaah, the feelings!
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Relax, it's not real :pat: Well...not for me at least... :S
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:icongalm03:
Galm03 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
;u; gee...it'd be pretty bad if it was...
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
It'd be a life time trauma...but I don't even want to think about it :O
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:icongalm03:
Galm03 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
geez, even worse than my earthquake trauma >-< seriously, nothing worse than a scar in the heart...
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
Yes, you're completely right *o*
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:icongalm03:
Galm03 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
so, how's life, Maria? owo
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013
Kinda like wavy sea lately...I've finished first year at University, I've done it great, social life cool...but now I'm kinda down cuz everybody went somewhere and I'm alone :(
Wbu? *o*
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IlianaCordan Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Student Digital Artist
cooollll!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
Is it? xD Thaaaank you :glomp:
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:iconilianacordan:
IlianaCordan Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I loved your poem, a beautiful work!! :D
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
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:iconilianacordan:
IlianaCordan Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Student Digital Artist
:hug:
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DlAMONDS Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I love this! Thank you so much! ; u ;
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:iconmarija343:
Marija343 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
You're so welcome ^_^ I'm glad I could do a request for you :hug:
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